Internet Marketing Tycoon

**nixies78@yahoo.** · 04-25-2008, 06:11 AM

Hi

I know probable isn't the right place, but I was hoping for a bit of advice from you guys. I've been working on a site, http://www.shootexperience.com/ now we are getting lots of relavant traffic but no conversions at all.

If you have a minute please have a look and any advice would be greatfully recieved. This page specifically is not working:

http://www.shootexperience.com/events/home/CRP

What do you think is wrong?

Nixies

**willcode4beer** · 04-25-2008, 08:15 AM

During my first 20 seconds on the page, I couldn't figure out what the service is....

I see "Invigorate your office with a Shoot Experience", um, ok, what the heck is a "Shoot Experience"?

also, "The perfect tool for team-building, product launches and PR activities", great but, what is it?

A visitor should be able to figure out what it's all about in the first 5 seconds. After digging around the site for a little while I know you do some kind of event with cameras.

The very first thing on the page should be something that either sucks a visitor into the site or at least tells them what the service is.

**Feydakin** · 04-25-2008, 10:51 AM

Lol - I said exactly the same thing on another forum

**TomasFlax** · 04-26-2008, 02:17 AM

I agree with Paul, I could not
Get it in the first minute.
What’s to convert too?
Good Pluck,
Tomas

**chrishirst** · 04-26-2008, 06:08 AM

Maybe reading Don't make me Think would be a good idea.