Thinking about this again.
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You and I both know that your going to buy into one of the online business out there. You've seen the dream and you want in.
After researching all there is to offer, you find a program that you like and are ready to buy into.
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What does this mean? Everyone is going to "buy a business"? You say 'your'; it should be you're.
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through affiliate links are in everyway 100% there own
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--> "Their." Theres little excuse for this sort of thing.
This site is attempting...to pretend, to be a mirror of a thousand cheesey sales-tag sites. You know, the ones that are a single page and tell you how fat you are, then how thin you could be, then finally at the bottom-how much you will have to pay to be thin. It doesn't 1. Serve a purpose 2. Give any real explanation of what it is 3. Give any visual reason for a visitor to stay despite 1. and 2.
Graphics look just a little less respectable than clip art .
The flash links are not needed and in fact, you have to click on them in Ie6 just to make them function (all individually I might add).
I know this is your first site and I'm being as "gentle" as I can, but I mean why not just buy a template? If you are making a site, and it looks nothing like your favorite one to visit (visual design, writing, content, look, feel, purpose), then how can you expect your site to flourish?
My tips: If your going to do something, do the research and do it the right way.
If you don't have time for all that, you could get a wordpress or similar and do a good looking site at least, despite the lack of content. When -->you're <-- publishing a document, make sure you can at least run a spell check and read it over for edits.
In anycase, Good Luck~ I know you will improve if that is your goal.
